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Born Into The Darkness: Prlg

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Prologue



It was a cold May night, two years after  the birth of the two small children sleeping peacefully in her arms. She walked hurriedly through the burning town that was once their home, leaving everything behind. Occasionally tripping on loose stones and smouldering timber, she broke into a run, trying not to wake her precious babies. Her long brown hair, darker than the night itself billowed behind her in the wind as tears streamed silently down her cheeks.
Finally, after what seemed like years, she reached the forest on the outskirts of the town. But she could not stop, not yet. Not until they reached safety.
Onwards she staggered until the first light of the next day reached her eyes. Miles away from home, she was in a new forest. A scary new place with twisted trees and winding paths. She collapsed into a shivering heap, the children falling from her arms.
She tries to drag herself towards them, her precious baies, the only reason for her to live. Her arm reaches out to hold them when a large black boot came crashing down on her arm, forcing her to stop. A sharp pain shoots through her harm and she looks up to see a rough looking man smiling menacingly down at her.
He reaches down to the two small crying bundles of flesh still lying down on the cold forest ground. He picks them up and cradles them in his arms.
Writhing in pain she screams for him to stop, to put them down. But he just laughs, a cruel, heartless laugh. He slowley releases her arm from under his foot and turns to leave.
As he walks into the distance he can hear the woman's screaming and crying for him to stop, for him to give back her babies. He looks back one more time and smiles. Thinking to himself, 'I just ruined her life'.
He'd just stolen the twins who were born into the darkness.
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My new story about my OC's Evie and Ethan Kurai. They're twins, incase you hadn't noticed.
Anyway, this is just the prologue. Please let me know what you think, if no one likes it I won't continue.

If I see this anywhere else on the internet I'll personally desyroy the person responsoble. Okay?

:icondonotuseplz::iconmyartplz:

Enjoy~ :heart:
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kamberj's avatar
...Interesting *strokes imaginary beard* just a few minor edits, such as 'harms' is meant to be 'arms' no? And you repeated 'to drag' twice in that sentence.
I'm curious as to where you're going with this. It sounds like an interesting plot line. If you don't mind me saying though, you could use more description in your story, aside from the usual, run of the mill type stuff.
For example,
'...Hurriedly she walked through her burning home town, occasionally tripping over loose stones and smouldering timber. Cradling the children, she tried not to wake them as she broke into a run, her long brown hair, darker than the night itself whipping out behind her as the tears streamed down her cheeks...'

You don't have to if you don't want to, I'm just saying it as a friendly critique :)